Betrayed: Chapter 8 (Part 2)
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zelda_queenZeldaQueen: Alright. After that last bit, we still need to finish up the chapter. Not too much more to this one, folks. Let's go!
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Chapter 8 (Part 2)
ZeldaQueen: So, after that...awkward conversation, Zoey and Stevie Rae head off to watch a movie with their friends. We're beaten over the head with the fact that YES, ZOEY LIKES BROWN POP and Zoey makes a joke about how Stevie Rae is addicted to Lucky Charms. Has she eaten Lucky Charms more than once over the course of the two books thus far? Stevie Rae also argues that Lucky Charms are good for you, to which Zoey comments "Really? So, tell me, what are marshmallows—a fruit or a vegetable?"
They meet Erin, Shaunee, and Damien in the front area of the dorm, and Stevie Rae tells them that they were held up because she had to take a bowel movement. In those very words. Yes, it's a callback to that horrible joke from the first book. Why do you ask?
Just as they're about the pop in the movie, what should appear but the plot! Hooray! Turns out that missing boy has turned up in the Arkansas River, dead from blood loss and apparently having been attacked by animals. Ruh oh!
Zoey's Deus Ex Machina feeling goes haywire at this, and it only intensifies when she sees that another football player at her former high school has gone missing. This dude is the cousin of the murdered boy, and yes we're reminded that both are very cute.
Stevie Rae comments "The Union football team is dropping like flies" and then notices that Zoey looks ill. Zoey insists that she's fine, and says to start the movie without her, she needs a breath of fresh air. Outside, Zoey gets all sick and dizzy from her Deus Ex Machina feeling and wonders why it's going off. After all, it's not like anything suspicious at all is happening, is it?
God, what a moron.
Zoey decides to calm herself by going to brush Persephone, so she heads off for the stables. As she sets off, she hears a wailing sound, like someone in pain. She goes to investigate and sees Aphrodite, all hunched over on the ground. Aphrodite is crying and going on about how she's cold and submerged in water and can't get out, and clearly is having a vision. Zoey tells her they have to see Neferet about the vision and Aphrodite flips out and starts shouting how she will not be goin to Neferet with this.
I have to agree with Aphrodite here. Zoey? You eavesdropped on that conversation. You were told by Neferet that the visions were supposed to be fake. Even if Neferet isn't up to something (*cough*), she clearly isn't trying too hard to take the visions seriously. And given how she drove Aphrodite to tears before, does Zoey really think Aphrodite will just trot on back, to be ridiculed and mocked and told that her visions of death were untrue and she's hated by Nyx?
Zoey's immediate reaction, upon seeing how scared Aphrodite is to go to Neferet? Decide that Aphrodite's powers don't really work and clearly this is all a bid for attention. Yes, that's why she's all alone by the stables, instead of in the recreation room or a dorm or some place where people would see her.
God, what a moron.
Aphrodite, who is still crying and chattering and flailing and apparently still in great distress, begs Zoey to stay and listen to the vision. Zoey basically tells her to piss off and starts to leave.
I would like to remind the jury that Aphrodite has visions of disasters and lots of deaths. She's actually upset over what she's seeing and trying to make sure someone hears about it. Zoey, because she just doesn't like Aphrodite and figures she's attention-whoring, is the one saying "fuck that noise" and ignoring the fact that innocent lives may be at stake. You know, like how how she bashed Aphrodite for in the first book, to the point where that was our main conflict.
I'm just saying...
Zoey tells Aphrodite to leave her alone, because "Whatever's going on, it's about you—not me". And, you know, the people who may or may not be dying. Just thought I'd toss that out there. Aphrodite says that if Zoey doesn't listen to the vision, her grandmother will die. And our chapter ends on that lovely cliffhanger
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Onward to: Chapter 9
Back to: Chapter 8 (Part 1)
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Projection Room Voices: Starting Media in 3...2...1...
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Chapter 8 (Part 2)
ZeldaQueen: So, after that...awkward conversation, Zoey and Stevie Rae head off to watch a movie with their friends. We're beaten over the head with the fact that YES, ZOEY LIKES BROWN POP and Zoey makes a joke about how Stevie Rae is addicted to Lucky Charms. Has she eaten Lucky Charms more than once over the course of the two books thus far? Stevie Rae also argues that Lucky Charms are good for you, to which Zoey comments "Really? So, tell me, what are marshmallows—a fruit or a vegetable?"
They meet Erin, Shaunee, and Damien in the front area of the dorm, and Stevie Rae tells them that they were held up because she had to take a bowel movement. In those very words. Yes, it's a callback to that horrible joke from the first book. Why do you ask?
Just as they're about the pop in the movie, what should appear but the plot! Hooray! Turns out that missing boy has turned up in the Arkansas River, dead from blood loss and apparently having been attacked by animals. Ruh oh!
Zoey's Deus Ex Machina feeling goes haywire at this, and it only intensifies when she sees that another football player at her former high school has gone missing. This dude is the cousin of the murdered boy, and yes we're reminded that both are very cute.
Stevie Rae comments "The Union football team is dropping like flies" and then notices that Zoey looks ill. Zoey insists that she's fine, and says to start the movie without her, she needs a breath of fresh air. Outside, Zoey gets all sick and dizzy from her Deus Ex Machina feeling and wonders why it's going off. After all, it's not like anything suspicious at all is happening, is it?
God, what a moron.
Zoey decides to calm herself by going to brush Persephone, so she heads off for the stables. As she sets off, she hears a wailing sound, like someone in pain. She goes to investigate and sees Aphrodite, all hunched over on the ground. Aphrodite is crying and going on about how she's cold and submerged in water and can't get out, and clearly is having a vision. Zoey tells her they have to see Neferet about the vision and Aphrodite flips out and starts shouting how she will not be goin to Neferet with this.
I have to agree with Aphrodite here. Zoey? You eavesdropped on that conversation. You were told by Neferet that the visions were supposed to be fake. Even if Neferet isn't up to something (*cough*), she clearly isn't trying too hard to take the visions seriously. And given how she drove Aphrodite to tears before, does Zoey really think Aphrodite will just trot on back, to be ridiculed and mocked and told that her visions of death were untrue and she's hated by Nyx?
Zoey's immediate reaction, upon seeing how scared Aphrodite is to go to Neferet? Decide that Aphrodite's powers don't really work and clearly this is all a bid for attention. Yes, that's why she's all alone by the stables, instead of in the recreation room or a dorm or some place where people would see her.
God, what a moron.
Aphrodite, who is still crying and chattering and flailing and apparently still in great distress, begs Zoey to stay and listen to the vision. Zoey basically tells her to piss off and starts to leave.
I would like to remind the jury that Aphrodite has visions of disasters and lots of deaths. She's actually upset over what she's seeing and trying to make sure someone hears about it. Zoey, because she just doesn't like Aphrodite and figures she's attention-whoring, is the one saying "fuck that noise" and ignoring the fact that innocent lives may be at stake. You know, like how how she bashed Aphrodite for in the first book, to the point where that was our main conflict.
I'm just saying...
Zoey tells Aphrodite to leave her alone, because "Whatever's going on, it's about you—not me". And, you know, the people who may or may not be dying. Just thought I'd toss that out there. Aphrodite says that if Zoey doesn't listen to the vision, her grandmother will die. And our chapter ends on that lovely cliffhanger
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Date: 2011-05-08 08:59 pm (UTC)"Damien's lack of interest in female *ahem* companionship, in this version, causes a problem because, as a Designated Protector, vampyre society is worried that he will lack the necessary devotion to whatever Lady he's supposed to protect. His flamboyancy is shown to be a reaction to his physical frailty and the hell he catches about it, so he just prefers to retreat to things that aren't so physically demanding. He's actively practicing in-yo-face defiance at all times because he gave up. (PERSONALITY. IT IS NOT HARD.)"
This. So much.
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Date: 2011-05-10 03:37 am (UTC)(no subject)
Date: 2011-05-10 06:35 am (UTC)Such a story Aphrodite's attempted rape in the beginning would have not only been addressed, but also have been treated in an appropriate fashion. Erik would be startled by the fact that a fellow vampire fledgling cares. He also still has a unique connection with his human life.
It would have also been shown that Aphrodite was reacting to her own lousy life combined with the attitudes of the other vampires; she had no friends on the outside to contact (they told her to piss off in contrast to our lead; you know in a better book) and was desperate to be accepted by the vampires.
Originally when she arrived she was much like Zoey, but now she was broken and unable to comprehend human empathy; she used Erik for sex until he got sick and tired of such a loveless relationship that went nowhere. (He had original been with her in hopes of rekindling her human emotions with his love and kindness, because at the time it seemed like there was hope , but alas it was to late)
This would have been used to draw a comparison to Zoey's life making each a deeper and more fascinating character.