Well, that was the most rushed first chapter to a story ever. Tension, what's that? How the hell did these two get published?! It's like it was a game of laser tag: one minute Zoey's chatting, next she's zapped with The Mark ™ :P And in true Mary Sue-style, it's like nothing ever happened a minute later yet Zoey shows no real fear over being Marked, it's more like, 'Uh, totes inconvenient!' :P
And the only thing mildly worse than sparkly vamps can only be perky teen girl vamps! Y'know, they act like it's gonna be bad, but revel in it like a total Mary Sue later on: 'Oh, lyk, we ttly drink blood now!' :P because the author/s take out the conflict and make it The Coolest Thing Evers.
Also, the whole acting like typical teen girls thing: why do all teen girls in young adult lit have to be portrayed as bitchy and shallow nowadays? Isn't that more of a stereotype now? I knew girls like that, but not ALL girls were or still are. The girls I met during my lasting teaching prac in the accelerated English class were among some of the most bright and perceptive girls I'd ever met and highly intelligent and not in the least bit superficial. And also hated Twilight as much as I do :P Seriously, writers, can you just write women in fiction that are more realistic and ones we actually like? (By the way, I saw this book in the library and the last school I did teaching prac and already got vibes from it even back then :P) I mean, why do some girls have to strive to be stupid and mediocre because God forbid you should actually be seen to be smart and ambitious? (now I'm thinking of that P!nk song 'Stupid Girls,' pretty fitting :D) Why can't girls have a character in literature to like?
Oh, and 'vampyres'? How 'uber-goffick' :P
And nice little ethnic-drop into the story there, Zoey. 'Oh, I just happen to be Native American, don't you know?' and reminds you ever five minutes. I'm all for diversity in characters and do it often in my own stories, but c'mon!
Anyway, I just got around to reading this spork and am loving it so far, good job! :D
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Date: 2011-02-11 01:16 pm (UTC)And the only thing mildly worse than sparkly vamps can only be perky teen girl vamps! Y'know, they act like it's gonna be bad, but revel in it like a total Mary Sue later on: 'Oh, lyk, we ttly drink blood now!' :P because the author/s take out the conflict and make it The Coolest Thing Evers.
Also, the whole acting like typical teen girls thing: why do all teen girls in young adult lit have to be portrayed as bitchy and shallow nowadays? Isn't that more of a stereotype now? I knew girls like that, but not ALL girls were or still are. The girls I met during my lasting teaching prac in the accelerated English class were among some of the most bright and perceptive girls I'd ever met and highly intelligent and not in the least bit superficial. And also hated Twilight as much as I do :P Seriously, writers, can you just write women in fiction that are more realistic and ones we actually like? (By the way, I saw this book in the library and the last school I did teaching prac and already got vibes from it even back then :P) I mean, why do some girls have to strive to be stupid and mediocre because God forbid you should actually be seen to be smart and ambitious? (now I'm thinking of that P!nk song 'Stupid Girls,' pretty fitting :D) Why can't girls have a character in literature to like?
Oh, and 'vampyres'? How 'uber-goffick' :P
And nice little ethnic-drop into the story there, Zoey. 'Oh, I just happen to be Native American, don't you know?' and reminds you ever five minutes. I'm all for diversity in characters and do it often in my own stories, but c'mon!
Anyway, I just got around to reading this spork and am loving it so far, good job! :D