The Realm of Literacy

I think those fragments get a bit more bearable if you add a pause between them and read them with different inflections.

Stepping out with bare feet to stand in the centre of an open area in the graveyard. / Inhaling deeply and tilting his head up to study the stars. / He was smiling when he looked down.

That, however, sounds like some kind of strange poetry when read out loud. Kind of like a haiku with way too many syllables. Not to mention that it was completely unnecessary information and pretty pointless.

I'll second everything madamchaos said above. Holly had all the information she could ever need to figure out that the maze was a trap and that someone was out to get her, and she still dragged Cedric with her to the graveyard. My jaw dropped when she stunned him. That was one of the most stupid things I have ever seen.

I did love how she kind of handwaved Wormtail cutting off his own hand, though. Because, you know, to have to watch someone cut off their own hand in one slice is no big deal. A bit cringe-worthy, perhaps, but nothing more. Sure.