I've… totally given up on understanding this story. Seriously, chains out of nowhere, the lead characters not fighting back or doing anything of note, contrived events and telling things instead of showing… I just don't care anymore :D The sporking is the only thing getting me through it, it's great. And how is Patch the Great Big Hero if Fitzpatrick all-out admitted that he took his time to help his supposed beloved and Vee? What about his stupid angel powers and being impervious to pain? He's pretty much just either leisurely wandering around or invading Nora's body (:O) or yelling shit at her!
And how much more shit can Fitzpatrick lift from Twilight? First the biology class plot, then Nora trying to remember her 'self defence' techniques and now Nora being stupidly led to the villain and wanting to sacrifice herself?
Wait - how can Nora go hide in a locker or whatever and pray the police just show up ad find her if nobody bothered to call them?
And Nora and Vee just don't think to pick up anything to use as a weapon at all and just beat the shit out of Jules? They don’t think to fight back at all in any way?!
Man, this story is such a mess!
(perhaps his balls were the source of his power?)
Even that would make for a great twist to this story :D 'So his power was in his balls the whole time?!'
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Date: 2011-12-15 01:51 am (UTC)I've… totally given up on understanding this story. Seriously, chains out of nowhere, the lead characters not fighting back or doing anything of note, contrived events and telling things instead of showing… I just don't care anymore :D The sporking is the only thing getting me through it, it's great. And how is Patch the Great Big Hero if Fitzpatrick all-out admitted that he took his time to help his supposed beloved and Vee? What about his stupid angel powers and being impervious to pain? He's pretty much just either leisurely wandering around or invading Nora's body (:O) or yelling shit at her!
And how much more shit can Fitzpatrick lift from Twilight? First the biology class plot, then Nora trying to remember her 'self defence' techniques and now Nora being stupidly led to the villain and wanting to sacrifice herself?
Wait - how can Nora go hide in a locker or whatever and pray the police just show up ad find her if nobody bothered to call them?
And Nora and Vee just don't think to pick up anything to use as a weapon at all and just beat the shit out of Jules? They don’t think to fight back at all in any way?!
Man, this story is such a mess!
(perhaps his balls were the source of his power?)
Even that would make for a great twist to this story :D 'So his power was in his balls the whole time?!'