I know I shouldn’t be surprised how truly stupid Nora is, but if someone appeared at my door drunk and pushing me around like Elliot did, the whole house would have heard it and no doubt my dad would have been there ready to beat him (thank god my dad was once a second degree black belt in tai jitsu and on three samurai swords… ;P)
How could her mum have not heard any of that? And even if Nora lied about why Elliot was there at the door, don't you think her freaking out would have instantly given her away to her mother and would question Nora what really is up?
Look Fitzpatrick, if you're going to write a villain don't give their hand away too soon. You have to ease into their course of action, not derail Elliot instantly from wannabe nice guy to drunk arsehole within a few chapters. What is it with authors avoiding subtlety like the plague nowadays?
*steeples fingers* Tell me, Vee, how does saying “he was drunk” make his actions any more acceptable? If anything, it makes it worse because not only is he a violent bastard, he’s a violent bastard who partakes in a drink that impairs his judgment. Intoxication is not a valid excuse for his behavior. Nothing, possibly short of mind control or possession, does (and before you ask, no neither of those options are going on here).
Seriously, is Vee just missing a brain overall or does Fitzpatrick truly think that's how friendship between teen girls is actually like, that they're so totally inane and only squee over boys and stuff all the time and never analyse the consequences to anything in life and have nothing else to talk about? That's pretty offensive.
And I like the implication from Fitzpatrick there: it doesn't matter if someone is violent towards you or something else, he was just drunk anyway >.<
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Date: 2011-09-10 02:00 pm (UTC)How could her mum have not heard any of that? And even if Nora lied about why Elliot was there at the door, don't you think her freaking out would have instantly given her away to her mother and would question Nora what really is up?
Look Fitzpatrick, if you're going to write a villain don't give their hand away too soon. You have to ease into their course of action, not derail Elliot instantly from wannabe nice guy to drunk arsehole within a few chapters. What is it with authors avoiding subtlety like the plague nowadays?
*steeples fingers* Tell me, Vee, how does saying “he was drunk” make his actions any more acceptable? If anything, it makes it worse because not only is he a violent bastard, he’s a violent bastard who partakes in a drink that impairs his judgment. Intoxication is not a valid excuse for his behavior. Nothing, possibly short of mind control or possession, does (and before you ask, no neither of those options are going on here).
Seriously, is Vee just missing a brain overall or does Fitzpatrick truly think that's how friendship between teen girls is actually like, that they're so totally inane and only squee over boys and stuff all the time and never analyse the consequences to anything in life and have nothing else to talk about? That's pretty offensive.
And I like the implication from Fitzpatrick there: it doesn't matter if someone is violent towards you or something else, he was just drunk anyway >.<
No one cares about good writing anymore… :(