Er, well... I have a problem with trying to finish stories. ^^; I always end up adding and adding and I'm never completely satisfied until it all fits just right.
But I think a quick, rough example wouldn't hurt. --- "Well if it isn't Pinky..."
Snapping out my daze, I suddenly realized that my path had been blocked by Bernice and her backup squad. She wore too much make-up, like it was a second face, and was dressed in what I guess was "fashionable" at the time. All I saw was a red shirt with sequins sewn in, a black jacket and matching skirt. Why sequins of all things, I would never know.
As different as we were, she and I went way back. We were friends in kindergarden until I threw a water balloon at the back of her head at a party. Things probably could have wound up all right if her parents didn't bring her up as a spoiled brat who always got her way. Or if she wasn't wearing her favorite dress that day.
But now she and her stuck up friends were keeping me from my next class. (For some reason I could never really remember the others' names.) There was only three of them, but they were limber and could move fast to make sure I couldn’t get away. Students walked around us, trying to get to their next class before the bell rung. Which was about in two minutes.
Crud. I was going to be late.
"Hello, Berry," I greeted, keeping things casual. "How are you and the hens doing?" ---
And I'll stop right there to prevent this from being too long. (I have a really bad habit of just writing and writing even when I should have stopped several paragraphs back. XD; ) That has to the first time I've tried writing something in a high school setting. XD; Ah, gotta get out of the comfort zone. Though it feels like that could have been better, especially if I stretched out the info presented here. Like the OC reflecting on her relationship with Bernice as she runs off to class. Now that I look at it, maybe that should have been done in first person PoV. I like it better when things in first person PoV are found out through events and dialogue, not just being told something. Then again, it's not like their past is going to come up in conversation, so to expand on how their relationship was like before, it would have to be stated blatantly, but put in there during an opportune moment. Maybe when the OC is reflecting on "what could have been" or how things used to to be. (A habit to break maybe?)
Oh jeez! I'm sorry for the long post! I just tend to ramble when to comes to literature. ^^;
But yes, the world needs better literature. I swear it's getting difficult trying to find an interesting book now days. So tired of seeing romance and butchered mythologies.
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But I think a quick, rough example wouldn't hurt.
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"Well if it isn't Pinky..."
Snapping out my daze, I suddenly realized that my path had been blocked by Bernice and her backup squad. She wore too much make-up, like it was a second face, and was dressed in what I guess was "fashionable" at the time. All I saw was a red shirt with sequins sewn in, a black jacket and matching skirt. Why sequins of all things, I would never know.
As different as we were, she and I went way back. We were friends in kindergarden until I threw a water balloon at the back of her head at a party. Things probably could have wound up all right if her parents didn't bring her up as a spoiled brat who always got her way. Or if she wasn't wearing her favorite dress that day.
But now she and her stuck up friends were keeping me from my next class. (For some reason I could never really remember the others' names.) There was only three of them, but they were limber and could move fast to make sure I couldn’t get away. Students walked around us, trying to get to their next class before the bell rung. Which was about in two minutes.
Crud. I was going to be late.
"Hello, Berry," I greeted, keeping things casual. "How are you and the hens doing?"
---
And I'll stop right there to prevent this from being too long. (I have a really bad habit of just writing and writing even when I should have stopped several paragraphs back. XD; )
That has to the first time I've tried writing something in a high school setting. XD; Ah, gotta get out of the comfort zone. Though it feels like that could have been better, especially if I stretched out the info presented here. Like the OC reflecting on her relationship with Bernice as she runs off to class.
Now that I look at it, maybe that should have been done in first person PoV. I like it better when things in first person PoV are found out through events and dialogue, not just being told something. Then again, it's not like their past is going to come up in conversation, so to expand on how their relationship was like before, it would have to be stated blatantly, but put in there during an opportune moment. Maybe when the OC is reflecting on "what could have been" or how things used to to be. (A habit to break maybe?)
Oh jeez! I'm sorry for the long post! I just tend to ramble when to comes to literature. ^^;
But yes, the world needs better literature. I swear it's getting difficult trying to find an interesting book now days. So tired of seeing romance and butchered mythologies.