the real reason his drinking bothered her? Heath would get fat from the beer.
I remember the authors thanking someone in the acknowledgments for helping them sound like teenagers; Apparently, they think all teen girls think this way, which is like Meyer thinking Bella represents the "everygirl." No. Just because you think teen girls really are all judgmental airheads (or you were yourself at that age), does not mean we all are/were.
Speaking of Bella, this Zoey girl reminded me of her instantly, what with the constant bitching about everyone around her. Hey, I didn't like some of the people I went to high school with either, but there were still people/other things I found to not bitch about. Optimism--you and Zoey should try it.
And man, what is it with suethors and telling us every last detail about their SI's looks? I like to be told only the most noticeable things, like how Rowling mentions Snape's "hook nose" or Harry's messy hair--you know, things that can help me picture them better. She still leaves quite a bit to the imagination. Telling me everything about every feature on someone's face doesn't help me picture them any better. Is it just me?
Anyway, great job on the first chapter and I can't wait for the others! :D Your ability to read through this prose amazes me--seriously. I think I made it about halfway before giving up. While Meyer's prose makes me laugh ('cause she's being 100% serious when she writes it) or just slightly pisses me off, the way Zoey talks just pains me. Her vapid commentary and bitching puts even Bella's to shame.
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I remember the authors thanking someone in the acknowledgments for helping them sound like teenagers; Apparently, they think all teen girls think this way, which is like Meyer thinking Bella represents the "everygirl." No. Just because you think teen girls really are all judgmental airheads (or you were yourself at that age), does not mean we all are/were.
Speaking of Bella, this Zoey girl reminded me of her instantly, what with the constant bitching about everyone around her. Hey, I didn't like some of the people I went to high school with either, but there were still people/other things I found to not bitch about. Optimism--you and Zoey should try it.
And man, what is it with suethors and telling us every last detail about their SI's looks? I like to be told only the most noticeable things, like how Rowling mentions Snape's "hook nose" or Harry's messy hair--you know, things that can help me picture them better. She still leaves quite a bit to the imagination. Telling me everything about every feature on someone's face doesn't help me picture them any better. Is it just me?
Anyway, great job on the first chapter and I can't wait for the others! :D Your ability to read through this prose amazes me--seriously. I think I made it about halfway before giving up. While Meyer's prose makes me laugh ('cause she's being 100% serious when she writes it) or just slightly pisses me off, the way Zoey talks just pains me. Her vapid commentary and bitching puts even Bella's to shame.