http://july-morning1.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] july-morning1.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] zelda_queen 2014-07-24 04:04 pm (UTC)

I think you accidentally put another count of All Women are Lustful up there. If I missed, I apologize.

I can understand her being nervous, but they could try and put a new spin on it, at least. Like where she finally gets over that nervousness and, even if they aren't romantically involved, might become good friends. Like I did. I have a feeling this is aimed at teens, and it would really help if you consider your audience lives in the real world and not a sappy high school drama.

Also, wow. Coach really seems like he doesn't qualify for this job at all.

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